The Bad Touch

There’s a song called “The Bad Touch”, but that isn’t what I’m blogging about today. Nope, it’s all about POV (point of view).

I have three books out with a fourth on the way, but I would never consider myself an expert writer. I’m also oppositional-defiant, so all those classes and workshops I take, I don’t actually follow what I’m taught. *cough* I write the way my brain works, the way my creativity wants to put the story down. I’ve discussed plotting before and how I don’t do it, so it shouldn’t surprise anyone that I don’t follow POV rules either.

When I read a book, I want to know what the two main characters are thinking. Throw in the villain’s POV and I’m a happy camper. I really do like digging inside the villain’s head, by the way. I’ve been told I write good villains and I’m not sure if that’s a compliment or a cause for concern.

Anyway. POV shifts should feel right. (Again with the organic writing.) You can’t end a character’s scene in a blah moment. You know, like when they’re brushing their teeth or something. I like to change POV when something incredible has happened, when you actually want to know what the character is about to do.

Let me see if I can come up with an example…Okay. No, that won’t work. Hm. How about…

Her chest swelled with indignation. How dare he? She was the elder of this council and she would be damned if she’d give up control to some—her chest swelled further—no good, two-faced, lying—

The buttons of her blouse pinged as they bounced across the room, her fellow councilors dodging out of the way to avoid an eye injury. She looked down to see that yes, she was flashing the entire court and he was looking smug. Her hands clenched as rage filled her.


He’d been staring at those buttons hard enough that it was a mixed blessing when they’d popped free. He’d managed avoid catching one in the eye and boy, was he glad. He wouldn’t have missed the sight of that gorgeous chest for the world…

See what I mean? You just know she’s going to do something, but instead of knowing exactly what it is,  you’re in the POV of the person who’s about to become minced meat. That’s how I like to do POV shifts. I’m sure there’s some word for it, but I wouldn’t know it.

I write by feel. I ask myself a whole host of questions to avoid becoming a head hopping bunny:
– Is this character’s POV getting boring?
– Where can I do a shift and it “feel” right?
– Who should have a POV here?
– Is it too soon for a POV shift?

If you decide to write other POVs in the story, you have to choose whose POV you’re going to use. I like hero, heroine, villain, and one close friend of either main character. These shifts can change the entire tone of the story from dangerous to humorous, etc. It’s all on how you want your story to sound.

Did any of this make sense, or should I stop trying to sound helpful?

Your Hump Day Fox,

Danica Avet

About danicaavet

Danica Avet lives and writes in the wilds of South Louisiana. Unmarried with no children, she's the proud pet of two cats and a dog. With a BA in History, she decided there were enough fry cooks in the world and tried her hand at writing. Danica loves losing herself in the antics of her characters and blushes more often than not at the things they do. She likes to define her work as paranormal romance with a touch of Cajun spice, but most times her characters turn the notch up to "five-alarm fire"!
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10 Responses to The Bad Touch

  1. This is really wonderful. A great way to ‘splain it Lucy! I like the bunny analogy and the way you did the segue into the other POV. Nicely done!


  2. Your POV shifts work so well readers can clearly follow with no confusion or disappointment (and you happen to be published, so an editor agrees) and that says everything! Love the example you used!

    Everyone should pick up a book from THE VEIL series! They’re so worth it!

    Keep them coming, Cajun girl!


  3. jeff7salter says:

    Late the party. don’t know where the day went.
    I liked the examples with the woman’s bosom popping out of her shirt. That’s always an attention-getter for me too. LOL


  4. Danica, if your books ever show up in the paper format let me know. I’ll be out buying them! (Yes, sorry to say I don’t own a reader and don’t expect to get one anytime soon, either) I loved your example (and not for the POV shift – because mine are very similar) because I love your humor!!!


    • danicaavet says:

      The first two are out in print now (only through Amazon or Barnes and Nobles) and the third should be out soon. I’m glad you enjoy the humor! I have to add that in everything I write because really, real life is just depressing enough!


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